Another extract from a very long writing exercise, alluded to the other day (Saturday), which I did really badly; mainly, I think, because I took the instruction - “rewrite” – a little too literally, using the ‘find and replace’ tool in word rather than a blank piece of paper but which now gives me something to post in the “titles longer than content” series of November posts; with a fish related photo as extra. Just to make things look different.

Before.

The sky was clear, mist hanging in the valley still unaware that the sun was coming even though the first rays of it’s autumn warmth were streaking through the branches of the trees.

After.

The sky bright, mist snug in the hilly folds still blind to the sun’s coming - even though the first fingers of its thin glow were slicing through the twisted trunks of the trees.